Unlike Minerva ended in 2003. In 2009, on its 10th anniversary, I added commentary to the complete run.
Brisbane and Kimberly now star in
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Comic for week 26This is, easily, the most heavily rewritten arc I've done. Everything was gone over two or three times to make sure it was done right. Then I went and revised it again for printing in pamphlet format. I wanted to be sure that it wasn't only funny, but showed you who the characters were and how they interacted. I think the best thing you can do in a humor strip is to cut gags. If you tell every joke, the plot won't ever move. This is also the most rewritten commentary, since I overwrote it twice by accident.One of the changes I made from the first version was adding the "Miss" in panel 1, to indicate that they don't know each other yet.
This pretty much summarizes Caleb. He's not onstage; he's just juggling to show that he can. This sequence originally ran in black and white. I added the caption in the second run. I think I drew all the word bubbles in this series by mouse.
The song is "Wrap Your Troubles in Dreams". Bing Crosby had a hit with it in the 1930s. I've only heard Dennis Day's version, though. I think it deserves a much larger place in the American Songbook than it has. Woody Guthrie hated it. Anyhow, Peter is turned up to 11 when he shows up.
I have no idea what the joke was supposed to be. I try not to worry about things like that. I like how the spotlight effect turned out. But this is how I wanted the introduction to go the first time around (and why I rewrote it).
Caleb's response, originally, was "You didn't do it any favors either, Spike". I wish I had kept that line. I understand why I didn't - the revision makes it a bit more obvious how butchered the routine was, but it's less funny.
Kimberly's response was originally "I have all sorts of things". Either is accurate, I suppose. I remember digitally editing something in this arc, and I think it was one of these panels.
Ah, yes. Caleb and girls. The main B-plot of Unlike Minerva. I wanted to establish Caleb's character - unlike Peter or Kimberly, he's not exaggerated. He's always like this.From here you can go back to the previous week, which isn't actually in continuity, or you can go to the original beginning
Prelude, pt 1
drawn by Balade
Or you can go back to the very first beginning
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